YOU ARE THE BEST! PUT MORE UP SOON!

Shadow.

Poor Steele. But Good.

that was so.....sad

DOUBLE LOVE
you should write one more to the series i
rlly want to know what happens. also very violent, but
amazing writing skills continue writing your good!!!!!sad
and amazing.....

thanks wolf call. yea Kash thinks Kiona is the prettiest
girl so he is after her until Achak kills him.

Evil Kash! Can't he leave her alone? Poor Kiona and Achak!
Great Story!!!!

no break. Achak is spelled right. And no. Achak did not
die...

Did Achak die now Well it was a good story (sorry if I have
spell Achak wrong)

thanks maya for the tips. I will try to fix it up maybe.

Personally, I didn't get this at all. It rhymed in some
parts, but then didn't in most of it. And when it DID
rhyme.. it made no sense. Why would Steele call himself
dumb? He thinks hes god's gift to the world - obviously he
wouldn't insult himself. And it said something about him
eating a sandwhich or something? That made absolutely no
sense. I hope you realize for it to be poetry, it doesn't
have to rhyme. Thats just ONE type of poetry.

relly good

It's very simple, really. You go to "Send to Site," then
"fanfiction," then select the story, then click on "Modify
fanfic information," and just scroll down until you see the
ratings menu. If there's a problem, you can always ask a mod
for assistance.

Maybe I am throwing out crazy ideas, but maybe your little
fics that you call 'parts' could simply be made into ONE
whole story. They sure would be LONGER that way. You seem to
write sort fics of the sort.

I would Dragon Tamer but I don't know how I would do that.
Maybe I will just switch up the summary.

You write intensely, that's for sure. I don't want to sound
picky (thanks for pointing that out for me, BTW), but would
you please adjust the story settings so that the rating
matches what it says in the summary?

Tala---> Oh well. Thanks for it
Catwhohas14tails--->
THANKS!!!

Whoa! :O Intesne! Not bad tho ;D

Shouldn't it be: Someone Kiona doesn't Want, wants HER?

But, I guess it was okay, some parts were-- Umm--
I'll just say creepy. You don't usualy write like that-- if
you know what I mean.

But it was okay.

uh,,,kay then tala,,, i guess

Uuuuhhh, Steele, I hope you don't call me too honest, but
I'm sorry, it didn't apeal too me.

steele_rox --> Sorry. I'm working on trying to emphasize the
positive a little more,but I guess I'm not there yet. Don't
get me wrong, I like the story. It's definitely good so far.
I was just trying to offer a few tips that could make it
even better.

don't worry this one is going to go on for quite some time
that is if it isn't terrible

Well, what should I say.....
Can't wait for the
continue

thank you for the tips Dragon Tamer

but i just
want to let you know that I think you are tooo honest. I am
sorry but I it is true. Becuz you tell us the exact truth
and that isn't bad but sometimes you go to far and hurt our
feelings

Much better. Nice tension, a little mystery with the black
figures, and a suspenseful ending. This one has potential.
The only problem is that it's too brief in familiarizing the
characters, and you might want to reclassify it as "Flashback/Character Development" (the current classification is a bit misleading). Work on that and you could have something really
dynamite.

you are a really great writer *favs*

i think you mean perfection? not pefecton?

Dragon Tamer- Revenge from Tessa. She could plan to brake
them up! PEFECTON!

also, DT, i am writing Double Love PArt 4 so yea

Well, like I said, I wasn't trying to put you down. I'm just
saying you should take what works and go with that next
time.