new fanfic please feel free to comment

Good story. However, the grammar may need to be a bit improved as well as punctuation. Plus, it was a tad confusing of which character was speaking which line. That may need a little improvement as well.
Overall though, it was a wonderful story. ^^

aww thanks guys

your in my faves!

awsome! is there a part 2?! can't wait to read more of your awsome fan
fic's!

Loved it!! I think it's great for your first one!! *Faves* ;]

brilliant twiggy cant wait for you to write more P.S congrats to
author of the day

Pretty good, could have used some more details, but I liked it!

Great story.

thanks everyone im gunna rewrite it as soon as i get my own comp