Glad I could help. Another tip I would give you is to try
not to overdo it on the violence. There's a limit to what's
allowed on the site concerning blood, gore, etc. I'm not
exactly sure where the boundary lies (I believe the key
detail is how descriptive the violence is or how much
violence there is as opposed to actual story) and believe
me, I've seen some that were way worse than yours. But it's
still good to keep in mind, I think.

Dragon Tamer- good point, and yes you are right.
Unfortuently that is something Im going to have to work on!
Oh well, at least I have something to aim for now! I
appreciate you being honest enough though to point those
things out to me. Ill have to make the third part flow
better and make the legend more concise!

OK. I sorta see what you mean about legends, although I think in that case there ought to be a more distinctive boundary between legend and prophecy.

Good points Dragon Tamer and I appreciate your thoughts.
To me the point of a legend is to be self-contradictory. What I mean is that a legend is only portrayed as how each person interpretes it and uses it to their advantage. You see in the first part it was mentioned by the wolf who killed Macca's mother, while in the second part it is heard from someone who seemes to not have an obvious agenda. Think of politics, whenever re-election comes around you hear many candidates speak about the same issues, but in different ways and with different viewpoints, same as here. But I will definitly keep in mind the idea about starting off with the legend, thats a good
suggestion! However if I write any more I will give away the plot! Hopefully when I get the next part up things will be a bit more clear to you and to anyone else who is confused! Thanks for the comment though Dragon Tamer.

DakotaWereWolf-Hehe thanks! I love how the last part of the story came together pretty well! And yeah macca goes through a lot, but only because he is a great character who I adore and the first one I adopted! He is very special!

Thanks Dakota! I have to put up the next part soon!