Ah, a Red Wolf mix. Nice to see one like that on here.

I understand, and I'm sorry to hear about your sister. It can be annoying for me as well when my brothers want to get on, but we have a pretty good method of working it out. When someone else wants a turn, they give whoever's on 20 minutes to finish what they're doing and then it's their turn. Works pretty well.

And you're most certainly welcome about the tips! Always happy to help. XD

As for the Spanish...I've also taken Spanish classes. Spanish 1 and 2. Yes, Bonita is a feminine word, but that dosen't necessarily mean it has to refer to a girl. For example, "casa bonita" would mean "pretty house".

Oh and just to ask anyone can answer..... but what kind of dog DOES she look like??



my mind is blank.......

Nattikat- Thank you for the tips :D But with the grammer thing (I'm not trying to be mean or ugly) but my sister was trying to get my off of the computer.. And you may think, Oh well she your sister of cource she's like that but heres the thing with my sister....
- she is a brat.
- she doesn't care what people say or do as long as they do something for her
-me being her sister... she treats me like I'm her slave.. she get freaking POed if I don't do something for her...
- When she is in a nice mood you have to know just what to say in order for her to stay in a good mood.....

Please note that I'm not takeing this out on you. She's just so hard to get along with sometimes....
I really appreciate the tips thanks!

And yes Bonita is "Beautiful Girl" in spanish. I'm taking spanish in school and I asked about it.

Great character, but wolfdogs cannot be AKC registered or certified. It's for purebred dogs only I think.

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3.) You mention that she met Balto and Jenna's family as a pup, but that would suggest that she was born near Nome. Now, that in and of itself is not a bad thing, however, you also mention that she's at least half red wolf, and red wolves don't live as far north as Nome. I suggest either choosing a different species or changing up her history a bit--perhaps she was born elsewhere, but when she was a bit older (I'd say at least a year), traveled northward and eventually ended up in Nome. Just an idea.

4.) I think you're putting a bit too much emphasis on a single day in the history here. It looks a little more like a watered-down fanfiction than a summary of the character's history. Rather than describing her life day-by-day, focus of key points in her history and how they impacted the character. Any development that may be important to the character's relationships and behaviors should be included in the history section of a bio. Extraneous details, such as the exact description of her first playdate, probably shouldn't be. Mention it if it's important, but don't overwork it too much. XD Exact details can be saved for a fanfiction.

5.) Final point: go through a quick grammar/spelling check before posting. Simple things like making sure that all the capitalization and punctuation is correct (it mostly is as the time, but there are a few spots), the difference between they're/there/their (in the first line of the bio, "there mother" should be "their mother" and "Balto and Jenna and there pups" should be "Balto and Jenna and their pups". "There" is a location, "their" means "belonging to them".), and the spelling of words such as "took", which you twice spelled like "tokk" here.

Well, hope that helps! ^^

"Bonita" actually means "pretty" in Spanish. "Beautiful girl" would be "chica hermosa". "Chica bonita" would work as well, but the term bonita is closer to "pretty" or "cute" than to "beautiful".

Anyways. For this character. She's not too bad compared to some of the other characters I've seen, but she could use a bit of work. I am going to explain how you can work on improving this character. Please understand that I'm not trying to be rude or diss your work; I only want to help by giving suggestions.

Design:
1.) Looks more like a dog than a red wolf cross, in my honest opinion. Which is perfectly ok, but if you want this character to be part red wolf, she should LOOK like she's part red wolf.

Here are some reference photos if you need ideas:
http://true-wildlife.blogspot.com/2010/11/red-wolf.html

And here's a few linearts that would match the species' build better than the one you're currently using here:
http://akudemonicwolf.deviantart.com/art/Jackal-Lineart-166976603< br /> http://anti-dark-heart.deviant [...] Iranian-Wolf-Lineart-182118992
http://delusionzofgrandeur.deviantart.com/art/Redwolf-Lineart-45007180


Bio
1.) A lot of the relations slots simply say "open". I would suggest taking those out of the bio for now as they really contribute no information about the character. You can edit them in as the relations are actually created.

2.) The "appearance" section. Now, this may be just me, but personally I think that that's a really pointless section to have when there's a picture of the character on the same page. Again, it just takes up space, and I would suggest removing it.

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2 favs!?!? wow!!

Thanks Marasol! :D I think your the first person to fav on of my characters!

Awww she's cute. 8)